I'm sure no one wants a full analysis of all the changes I made (and I did have to do that with the paper), so here is the story.
anyone wants to play a game with this, there are several names in the story
that I have admittedly stolen from other places. If you can tell
me where they came from, you a) know me way too well, b) have remarkably
similar interests, or c) are psychic. Have fun.
Comments? Write me at email@example.com.